Thursday, 25 November 2010

Edited rough cut of paranoia 1

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  1. Good conventional start and ending. Music is excellent and VO anchors meaning and narrative nicely. Sound bridges are effective.
    Some points to consider:

    - titles aren't up for long enough and are very hard to read
    - you need a shot of popular girl and boyfriend to anchor meaning of who is who
    - do we need to see the face of who says "I will figure this out"?
    - there seem to be lots of characters in the trailer; is this intentional?

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